Thursday, November 15, 2007

Icy Pause Train



The words for this week are:

Icy
Pause
Train


A secret revealed in the heat of the moment
His icy look is like a dagger in my heart
I walk away far from his accusing stare
I pause and ponder as the train passes me by

16 whisper(s):

gautami tripathy said...

Reflecting over it..

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Nothing crushes more than a secret given and rejected.

Rose

xo

Christy said...

this leaves one wanting to know more

Christy

UL said...

How lovely! Great play of words, thank you.

paisley said...

reminds me of the scene from the movie "hud" with paul newman and patricia neal,, where he is saying good bye to her in the empty train station at night... very good... excellent movie too, if you haven't seen it.....

tumblewords said...

Nice word images - icy/heat and ponder/passes...

Shephard said...

Oh, I like this a lot... it gives my brain a location and I can't help wondering about the exchange.
~S

TC said...

Oh man... I want to know what that secret was!!!!

pia said...

Icy looks are daggers in the heart

Jujee said...

Nice work...open to interpretation...I thought in the end the train of thought passed him/her by...or "him" like a train moving away.

Herb Urban said...

Very powerful start. I can only imagine what the secret may have been.

Truefaith1963 said...

"A secret revealed in the heat of the moment" - Oooo tell me more!
Many possibilities here...it makes me wonder, and I like that!!

Fledgling Poet said...

This definitely has me wanting to know more! There's a lot of emotion in this...thank you for sharing!

Bone said...

I agree with Herb. Powerful first line. Maybe some symbolism in the train passing by?

Christine said...

I'd really like to know what she said, and if he got on the train and left. What happened? Please tell us more!I mean this in a good way. It's quite a story. Evocative.

Michelle Johnson said...

What was this secret exchanged and did he leave on the train? Very intriguing piece. I love that you made me think about what happened. Keep up the good work.

Have a nice night.